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Chapter 2: Leila

The marble flooring of the bank had such a glossy sheen you could almost examine the tinier pores on your nose by looking down at it. It was the type of floor that would protest with a loud screech if you scuffed your shoe. And it seemed to Leila that it was the type of bank that would not take kindly to shoe-scuffers.

Rounds of hushed bank-chatter bounced timidly off the roof and the clock clock of purposeful footsteps snuck out from behind giant columns. She was in the middle of mustering up some determination when an unapologetic businessman bumped her from behind as he passed. She stared after the rude man, burning holes in the back of his head. He was now about twenty paces away, but she started after him; knowing that she was only trying to distract herself from why she was really there.

To her surprise, the man stole a furtive glance back at her and hurried his pace.

Leila quickly looked over to the lengthy bank-teller queues and then back in the direction the businessman had taken. A moment later she was in hot pursuit.

Many pairs of eyes flicked to her as she darted around a column and up a broad flight of stairs. But she never warranted more attention than a once-over. Her sneakers, skinny jeans and hooded sweatshirt set her apart from the overcoat-wearing, briefcase-carrying crowd. She rounded another corner and slowed her pace. The large room into which she’d entered was deserted.

She reached the centre of the room and stopped. Sunlight poured in through a giant solitary window on one side of the building, but it didn’t reach the walls on either side of her. It almost felt like the darkness didn’t want to be penetrated.

Leila peered into gloom uneasily, beginning to wonder whether this had been a good idea. Then she remembered the alternative.

‘Anybody home?’

The room darkened and Leila quickly looked back towards the window. It was just the sun going behind some clouds.

‘Hello?’

Something vibrated in pocket – her phone. But it was something else that she withdrew: she looked down at her hip uncertainly at a small piece of folded paper.

She stood very still. The strange businessman, it had to be his doing – he must have slipped it in when he had bumped her. She bit the tip of her thumb nervously.

A shuffle of footsteps from within the darkness made her jump. She tried to keep the nerves out of her voice, ‘Look, I know you’re there… Just give it up already.’

Nothing.

I should just go. she told herself. But somehow, inexplicably, she knew that something was keeping her there.

The piece of folded paper looked old; the edges slightly tattered and yellow. It felt like what she imagined papyrus would feel like – really old papyrus. Trembling ever so slightly, she unfolded the note.

Huh?

She turned the paper over and over in her hands – it was blank.

…Until she inched ever so slightly to her left, when, before her eyes, words shimmered to life on the page one by one. Leila blinked, hard, several times. There were now three lines, but only the first seemed to be in English: “Stay inside the sun.

Leila looked to the muted sunlight coming from the window behind her and then to the impenetrable shadows again. ‘Inside the sun…’ she said quietly, mulling it over. ‘It doesn’t say sunlight. But how could someone be inside the sun?’ She scratched her head and flicked her eyes around the room again. A presence was lurking in the shadows, she could definitely feel it.

‘Wait, “Stay”? Am I already—’ Leila’s eyes widened as she looked down at the floor. She was standing dead in the centre of a large pattern on the tiles: a depiction of an Aztec sun stone.

‘No way…’ she marvelled, stumbling back to get a better look.

A deafening, labouring groan shook the room. The force of it knocked Leila to the ground. Panicked, she watched as the darkness from either side of the room started to close in on her; the light coming through the window progressively and quickly narrowing.

She scrambled to her feet only to be buffeted over once more by a powerful blast of wind from within the encroaching walls of shadow. The paper in her hand seemed almost to glow. “Stay inside the sun.” it urged her.

Leila desperately crawled along the floor towards the Aztec sun stone. She was only a few metres away, but so was the darkness either side of her. She thought she could hear whispers carried by each gust of wind, imploring her to succumb to the inevitable.

The wind was too strong, she wasn’t going to make it in time - the whispers on the wind told her so, and she was starting to believe it. As the doubt swelled up inside her, so did the painful memory of why she was here: Stella’s deposit box.

Anger and yearning fuelled Leila as she made a final lunge for the sun. Just as she pushed off the floor she felt something propel her forward much further than she could have jumped by herself. Someone had pushed her. She landed just shy of the sun stone pattern but commando-rolled onto it. She spun around just in time to see the rude businessman smile kindly and incline his head to her before the darkness enveloped him and he was gone.

The circular sun stone pattern was staving off the dark, leaving Leila trapped inside a cylinder of light. Leila could hear the light buzzing, as though vibrating at a high frequency. It seemed to be getting louder, and the light brighter. She was curious about it, and the businessman, but couldn’t help but wish that this wasn’t happening to her. This wasn’t what she needed right now. Whatever it was.

The light became so bright that Leila had to close her eyes. There came a series of flashes, each happening more quickly than the last. With each flash came a different memory of Stella.

After a while, she felt an odd sensation, and then disappeared entirely.

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  1. Dale

    February 28, 2010 at 3:49 PM

    If the names I chose suck, please tell me so I can change them! Same goes with story elements/structure. Grateful for any advice, and happy to tinker with this entry (now or later down the track to suit eventual story-lines).

    Thought about whether Leila could be the absent library assistant, but I tend to think not... Though that's really not up to me anymore I guess. :P

    D.

    PS. Hate copying and pasting from word 2007 into blogger - formatting gets retarded. I had to go through the html and change the font paragraph by paragraph... :S

  1. Luke Davidson

    February 28, 2010 at 7:19 PM

    Haha, when I was reading it I was also wondering about whether she could be the missing assistant -- or whether she teleported to the library, hmmm.

    It's funny reading these chapters because I'm enjoying them, wondering about what comes next and then realise, oh I've got to decide that part now. lol. I'm looking forward to it, but I worry about how well I'll be able to match the tone/voice - you both do such a good job setting the scene with descriptions, which I suck at. Oh well, at least I can come up with better names than Dale. ;p

    Anywho, I thought the 'stay inside the sun' thing was particularly cool - reminded me of my favourite episode of a TV show that's too nerdy to name here.

    And I have that same formatting issue when I post Into the Black - so frustrating!

  1. Jimzip

    March 1, 2010 at 4:46 AM

    Awesome! Hehe. I loved it. Names and descriptions are fine.

    Only one thing that threw me, (ever so slightly ;) was the line "She was scanning her surroundings for a person with a floor-buffing machine ...". I see what you're getting at, but it made me think that Leila was in the bank to find someone with a floor buffing machine, rather than what you meant (I think, please correct me if I'm wrong haha), ie that she was standing there *expecting* someone with a floor buffing machine to be working non-stop polishing the perfect floor. Just a phrasing thing I think.

    Either way, despite that one niggle, I really enjoyed it. The Gringotts-ish feel at the start set it up well, and the descriptions and feel echoed the previous character's introduction, which I think is a good touch and ties it together nicely.

    Huzzah! Looking forward to Luke's entry, (and I agree Luke, I keep thinking the same thing: 'Oooh what's coming next!' then realising that we're creating that 'next' haha).

    Jimzip :D

  1. Jimzip

    March 1, 2010 at 4:47 AM

    P.S... I love Aztec history and mythology ... you're now my new best friend Dale... X) Can't wait to see where we take all this.

    Jimzip :D

  1. Dale

    March 1, 2010 at 5:04 PM

    Very happy you both liked it. :)
    Luke you've got nothing to worry about! Just write the way you normally do and it'll be super-awesome as always. (Interested in what that nerdy show is too, btw!)

    You were right about that line, James, I did mean 'expecting to see'. Will fix it up. Also, I had to look up what Gringott's was lol. See, Luke? I don't even need to read the Harry books to be able to sound like I have in my writing. ;)

    And yeah I was looking up Aztec sundials etc, and got caught up reading more and more and more about Aztec history. Quite fascinating!

  1. Luke Davidson

    March 1, 2010 at 11:38 PM

    Haha, when I saw the Gringotts reference I was going to mention to James that you'd have no idea what that was. (I decided to keep quiet though as I didn't want you to have your best friend status revoked so soon after acquiring it.) :p